June 8th, 2005

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I Revised a Story!

So, here's the revision. I cleaned up some minor things, changed the ending... hopefully it's a little less opaque now.

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[Still more spellcheck hilarity: Livejournal doesn't allow "Livejournal" or contractions, but it gave "Yoda" as a suggested alternative -- to "you".]

Edit: "The Fourth Profession" is a story by Larry Niven. I wrote "The Fourth Purpose." Changes above reflect this.
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